You clearly put a lot of work into this, and I know it takes a lot of effort to create such a lengthy multimedia piece. So first of all — congratulations. It’s also great that you were able to get so many people to help you on the project.
Did you create this for a client, or for your portfolio?
The wind-blown-sand title sequence at the beginning is impressive. How did you create it?
As for the story as a whole: It’s informative, fairly thorough, and you do include a nice variety of voices. In terms of the reporting, there are no real surprises — no “Gosh!” factor. But maybe it’s something I’ve already seen a lot of reporting on.
At times I wondered whether the imagery you’re showing fits the narration at that moment — there are a lot of traffic scenes and that fountain. Also, the video-still-video-still thing can be jarring at times. The stop-motion scenes of people moving across the plaza works, but maybe just once.
The ambient sound you’re using is kind of like white noise, at times sound like ocean waves and other times passing vehicles. So maybe think about mixing in a few more specific sounds, particularly if you can match them to what we’re seeing. Also the tempo drags at times — you have a slightly monotonous, hypnotic voice, so you if you can, pick up the tone at times to convey more emotion. If you can’t, you’ll need to use some music or something to keep it lively.
And watch for uniformity of volume (especially the second cut of Jeffery Jain).